My Best birthday
Today I’m going to talk about my best birthday its when I turned 6 years old.
My best birthday was when I had 5 pizzas for me my family, cousins, aunts and my uncles. When we got the pizzas it was delicious because all of them were my favourite, and everyone's favourite too.
When we ate all of the pizzas everyone went, and it was only me and my family. After everyone went we went straight away to my nanas house. When we got their she gave me 5 notebooks and 1 block of chocolate and colouring pencils with paint. After I got my presents from my nana I said “thank you” and went back home.
After that my mum and dad got me and my sister a PS4. Me my sister started playing on it but only for little bit. On my birthday my aunt came and gave me and my sister a makeup bag and we stayed over the night at my aunts house.
After that is was already night time so me my sister and cousin, went and did some craft stuff with paper, cardboard, scissors, glue stick and tape. With the stuff we got we all made a boat with paper and lanterns, and we made cards. It was the best birthday I have ever had in my entire life.
Paige
ReplyDeleteWe have just finished looking at your writing in our class here in Taranaki. One of our students would like to know if you are a Year 5 student why you have a picture that shows your 6th birthday. Of course you've written about your Best Birthday, which is one you remembered, so I thought that was a great thing. It made our students think and we've been discussing inference so that ties in nicely with what we are doing.
As the teacher I think its really wonderful that you have shown the success criteria for the task and put it on the post, that lets me and anyone else reading it see exactly what you were doing and what you were aiming to do.
We really enjoyed reading your work.
Mr Webb and Room Three, Auroa Primary School, Taranaki, New Zealand
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